Wednesday, July 25, 2012
What a waste!
Sydney's ordinarily tiny toes were swollen sausages, red and aching beneath giant cankles that threatened to split the soft, tender skin of her previously perfect legs. Sydney had been on her feet since first light, chopping, mixing, sautéing, tasting, adding a pinch here, a dash there, until every bite was perfect. They finally sat to eat; her heartbeat was audible. Louis slowly chewed his first bite, inhaled deeply, and wiped his mouth. "Not bad," he exhaled.
"Not bad?" She seethed. "That pretentious little, bow-tie-wearing, wanna-be-epicurean sonofabitch! He wouldn't know good food it he choked on it!"
This piece was written as an answer to this week's One Hundred Word Challenge from VelvetVerbosity to tell a story using the word epicurian which has changed quite a bit since it first came into use. I chose to go with its more modern, common usage.
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"Cankles?!" I love that. Nothing worse than slaving over a hot stove all day and not getting the recognition you've earned.
ReplyDeleteI have had many, many days like this one. When I was in culinary school we would stand for hours over the stove. If our chefs didnt like it we would have to start all over. Oh how I dont miss those days..
ReplyDeleteI like the word sonofabitch. It's one of the few words I know of - if not the ONLY word I know of - that should really be three words. But, just like in the story, when said properly, it is, in fact, one word - one very descriptive word.
ReplyDeleteI love this last paragraph:
ReplyDelete"Not bad?" She seethed. "That pretentious little, bow-tie-wearing, wanna-be-epicurean sonofabitch! He wouldn't know good food it he choked on it!"
You are so passionate here. I feel the strong emotions too..that was how I felt with my ex mom in law. LOL
Wonderful take. Love it!
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shakira
The ending was awesome. You could see her rage..I wonder if she let it erupt on him :)
ReplyDeleteMy only suggestion is to replace the second Sydney with She since we obviously know who you are referring to.
Thanks so much, everyone! And thanks for the suggestion, Carrie! I had fun with this one.
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